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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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In contemporary times, we live in a globalised society,
Hence
 it is important to have an exchange of different traditions, and cultural ideas,
Therefore
 Some educational institutes want their students to reap the benefits of
programs
such
 as the International student exchange.In
this
 essay, I would like to state the various benefits of
such
 initiatives, and why a few drawbacks can be ignored for the larger picture. In a globalised world, understanding different cultures and traditions may hold key to opening a lot of doors. Students who are part of
such
 transfer
programs
 not only get to learn about the different communities but
also
 get the opportunities to teach their own traditions to others
moreover
 it is a two-way exchange.
In addition
, A community is built between the students which will help each other in future.
This
 help could be in any form
such
 as helping with a job search or helping to find the best university in their respective countries.
For Example
, In one of
such
programs
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 I meet a person from the United Kingdom called Jon Buttler, who helped me with my college applications for the United Kingdom.
On the other hand
, One drawback could be that
such
 initiatives are expensive to fund,
therefore
 not all schools can afford them,
however
 in my opinion it is a minor drawback compared to how much
this
 will help in the overall growth of a young adult. In Conclusion, To make the world
smaller
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a smaller
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 place to live, and truly form a worldwide community it is important to promote
such
 outreach
programs
furthermore
 there might be a small monetary drawback attached to it, but overall it will have a positive outcome.
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