The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Recently, in
this
modern era, an ongoing debate over whether adherence to traditional ideas and views, which most seniors have, can be beneficial for young
people
to be prepared to live in
this
modern era has been sparked. While I personally agree that
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of these conventional values are outdated and ineffective, I opine that some of them are still constructive and helpful to have a better life. On the one hand, it is an irrefutable fact that numerous traditional ideas that elder
people
take up about the way of life are somehow meaningless and irrelevant for the present young generation, so the younger find it difficult to accept and embrace them.
For instance
,
people
in the past claimed that if a person is willing to be
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successful and have a high salary occupation, they need to study hard in one of
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fields
such
as medicine and engineering, whereas a great number of today’s
people
show off their skills like painting, acting and music on online platforms and they gain fame and a large sum of money as well. In fact, nowadays, being prosperous does not necessarily mean that you have tertiary education in academic majors.
Also
, in religious countries, unlike yesteryears’
people
, today’s adults make their own choices about who and when to marry and they believe that the old beliefs about marriage, finding a spouse and relationships are completely wrong and senseless. On
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top of that in recent years, the notion of gender
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has witnessed a tremendous change in comparison with the past.
In other words
, the traditional roles of men and women, as main
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and housewives, are being eroded. In
this
modern world, younger
people
are striving for gender equality.
On the other hand
, from my point of view, there are some traditional values that are certainly practical in
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world and should not be forgotten. Take
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in a community as a salient example. Old generations generally are happier because they attach great importance to
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in a group but current generation would rather
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be alone and their privacy is of utmost importance to them leading to being isolated and depressed.
Moreover
, elderly
people
emphasize being polite and respectful to develop great rapport with others as against
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most younger adults who often use offensive words, so they might miss out on an opportunity to make healthy relationships with others. By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that
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of traditional approaches to how
people
should live and behave are not relevant and functional for today’s younger generation, some of them are still valuable and
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should be adopted
such
as politeness and being sociable.
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