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As a result of tourism and increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problem?

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 modern world, a number of folks are migrating from one country to another because of many purposes, causing more need for aeroplanes.
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 change has many drastic effects on the environment and
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 problem can be solved by adopting some practical solutions. I will discuss both the problems and effective precautions in the upcoming paragraphs.
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 of all, extreme use of flight will pollute the air.As with the emissions of many dangerous gases
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 as carbon dioxide and many more from the aeroplanes are polluting the air.
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, there are holes in the ozone layer and the harmful rays of the sun are reaching the earth and affecting all the living creatures.
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, a survey conducted by the Deakin University
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 year showed the disastrous results of these harmful rays of sun on human beings as most people are suffering from skin and eye disease.
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 the over demand of flights are very dangerous for the environment. As every lock has its own key,
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 problem can be solved by taking some useable steps.
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 of all, the government should increase the price of travelling so that majority of people can't afford it.
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, authorities should have to put some strict measures to avoid unnecessary trips. If
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 situation can be resolved to a larger extent because a report showed that maximum travel is done by the visitors without any work or study-related purposes. In conclusion, I would like to say that innumerable demands for aeroplanes are affecting the world drastically by polluting the air and
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 problem can be solved by the collaborative efforts of the government, individual on the whole.
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