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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not buy the items listed. – I am on vacation • Say what you would like the bank to do to fix the problem.- investigate the case/send revised credit card statemen

Dear Sir, Hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in the best spirits. I am writing
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 letter to enquire about the purchases made on my
credit
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card
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. I am Sam, and I am a new client of your SBS bank.
Recently
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 your bank issued me a
credit
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card
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 with
ending
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an ending
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 in 6078. I often use my
credit
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card
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. But when I got the
credit
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card
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 statement
on
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 my mail
then
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 I was shocked to see that my
card
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 was used to buy expensive items.
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This
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These
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 purchases were made
on
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last
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 week,
while
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 I was on
business
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a business
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 trip. I am requesting you to solve
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 matter on
priority
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a priority
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 basis, and investigate the charges on my
card
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.
Also
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, you can send me a notification by email if any purchase
made
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is made
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 in future. I kindly request
to
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that to
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 send me a revised
credit
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card
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 statement as well. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours sincerely, Sam.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear focus and only one main idea. This helps the reader follow your thoughts better.
task achievement
Use clear and polite language throughout the letter. This will maintain a good and professional tone.
task achievement
You introduced yourself and stated your concern clearly, which is a good start to the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing remarks are polite and inviting, which creates a positive tone.
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