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in this society male sports are given more attention than female sports. Why it is so.? does this trend have a positive or negative impact on society.?

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In today's life,
sports
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 is gathering more and more reputation and is celebrated all around the world. People believe male
sports
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 given a considerable amount of attention in comparison to female
sports
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. It is the patriarchal culture and lack of
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 for
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 to enter
sports
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, that has led to
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 notion. In my mind,
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 is completely unfair and have a solid negative impact on
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, as it does not
support
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 gender equality. To commence with, we have an immensely male dominating
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 in all
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 aspects. Male superiority ideology was planted in our brains through movies, books and of course by the bygones generation, and it still prevails within us. For the same purpose, male sport is backed up by hefty investments in advertisement making it more available to the public. Since childhood boys are given more respect and freedom to choose what they desire to do in life. Some are actually pushed to pursue
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 more than academics.
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, Max Verstappen was trained to be an F1 racer from an early age, and by the age of ,24 he is already the F1 world champion. And for a matter of fact, F1 does not allow a female participant.
Females
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 are equally talented, it's just a matter of making it accessible for them to pursue
sports
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 as a career. Another supporting reason would be the lack of
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 from
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 to promote female
sports
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 or
females
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 in general. Girls are thought of as emotional fools and are thought to be incapable of doing anything other than household chores. From an early age, girls are bound to follow lots of rules and restrictions due to molestation and biased
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 settings.
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 makes it impossible for them to pursue a
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 career. Even if few succeed in breaking the social norms and achieving something good in
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, it is not advertised enough to bring to it peoples attention,
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 not gaining the reputation it should get.
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, After tons of hardship, Mary Com, the famous Indian boxer, got only one lac rupee for getting a gold medal in the Olympics, whereas when an Indian cricket team wins, they get 1 crore rupee.
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 the situation is changing nowadays, people are more promoting and making movies on female sportspeople, but it's a long way to make female
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, definitely, male dominance and lack of communal
support
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 to
females
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 are the sole reasons for male
sports
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 ruling the media currently, but in my opinion,
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 needs to change as it brings a huge negative impact on
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 which promotes gender inequality.

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