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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the concurrent world, people can enjoy
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advanced technology and
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 internet. The folk can connect to a load of information, but they may not analyse whether it is correct or not.
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, we cannot deny that we do have lots of choices since we can easily access
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the cyber in our generation whereas our parents may not have these benefits in their generations.
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 essay is going to discuss both pons and cons and my own opinions.
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, since the 18 century, the factories had huge improvements.
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, those companies can devote
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 inventing more kinds of products.
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, we do have various choices.
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 can have several benefits.
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, we can pick a suitable restaurant before we actually
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.
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 it might have a host of
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shop
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 to choose
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 can google it before we
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 in.
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, the community can make
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 right decision.
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, it may have unexpected consequences. The folk may be annoyed due to enormous patterns. Unlike
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 few decades, they were living in an infertility world.
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, they have no other alternative choice.
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, we may
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 by too many things since we living in a complicated society. It may eventually lead to mental health because of the anxieties on deciding
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 as insomnia. To conclude, I do think that it has its sunny sides. Yet, I think that the negatives are more than
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 positives due to the sickness behind
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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