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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In the concurrent world, people can enjoy
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advanced technology and
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 internet. The folk can connect to a load of information, but they may not analyse whether it is correct or not.
Also
, we cannot deny that we do have lots of choices since we can easily access
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the cyber in our generation whereas our parents may not have these benefits in their generations.
This
 essay is going to discuss both pons and cons and my own opinions.
Firstly
, since the 18 century, the factories had huge improvements.
This
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Additionally
, those companies can devote
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 inventing more kinds of products.
As a result
, we do have various choices.
This
 can have several benefits.
For example
, we can pick a suitable restaurant before we actually
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.
Although
 it might have a host of
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shop
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 to choose
, we
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 can google it before we
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 in.
In addition
, the community can make
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 right decision.
Secondly
, it may have unexpected consequences. The folk may be annoyed due to enormous patterns. Unlike
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 few decades, they were living in an infertility world.
Hence
, they have no other alternative choice.
However
, we may
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 by too many things since we living in a complicated society. It may eventually lead to mental health because of the anxieties on deciding
such
 as insomnia. To conclude, I do think that it has its sunny sides. Yet, I think that the negatives are more than
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 positives due to the sickness behind
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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