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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. Do the advantages outweighs the disadvantages.

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Amongst the many major issues with downsides and plus points, which individuals have to deal with,
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popularity of fast
food
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 is being certainly considered as one of the most controversial ones. While some
people
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 fall for the advantages of
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, there are many others who beg to differ. I mostly argue the disadvantages of
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 an idea. On the one hand, convenience foods are an opportunity to save
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time.
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most
of
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people
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 work and are busy.
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, If all family members work, they
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not
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no
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 time
cook
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meals
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 and these
meals
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 help
to
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them save time. The
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 type of
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meals
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, from many points of view, can be a good case in
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, family members are not forced to eat
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the same
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meals
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 and according to ready
meals
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, they can choose the
food
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 they want.
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, from an empirical viewpoint obtaining convenience foods might have a couple of downsides, as well. For one thing, ready foods
price
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 are looked at, by many
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 as a demerit.
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 fast
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meals
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 are being sold highly price by
junk
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the junk
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food
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company
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.
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, the
people
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 who prefer fast
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 to home
meals
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losing
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 a lot of money.
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,
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of
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 a practice but are not limited to money aspects. A great number of human beings is created
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an obese
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 nation by
prepackage
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food
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.
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, experts say that junk
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 occurs serious health problem and shrink
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the human
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 life period. Taking both sides into account, I can safely state that prepackage
food
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 has both advantages and disadvantages.
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, after
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thorough consideration , I have come to
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the conclusion
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 that the merits can eclipse the advantages.
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