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The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars cause many problems.what are those problems? In order to reduce problems,should we discourage people to use cars? Give reasons?

#cars #people
Today, a personal
car
 or two is considered almost
as
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 a basic necessity everywhere. But we are
also
 witnessing the environmental damage caused due to the pollution from the billions of
cars
 being used the world over. To add to the litany, is the noise pollution, the congested traffic, the parking issues, accidents etc.
Thus
, in order to reduce problems, it is high time that we should discourage
people
 to
use
 personal
cars
. The Ford 'Model-T', the
people
's
car
, was
first
 manufactured in the United States. Suddenly, the common man was liberated.
This
car
 was affordable and allowed everyone to travel freely and independently. The sales of
this
car
 skyrocketed and soon
this
 idea was copied worldwide. Truly, only cities like New York, London or Mumbai have adequate means of public
transport
.
Thus
 for many areas, especially semi-urban and rural ones, the personal vehicle provides the only means of
transport
.
However
, as outlined earlier, a plethora of problems are being seen due to the widespread
use
 of the automobile. The biggest damage has been to the environment. The toxic exhaust gases from the engines contain harmful levels of sulphur dioxide, carbon monoxide etc. which not only causes health problems but
also
 destroys the vital ozone layer. Another major problem is noise pollution, which
too
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 is a health hazard.
Also
, increased accidents and cases of road rage, traffic congestion and parking issues exist due to so many automobiles on the roads. Some cities like London, are imposing a congestion
tax
 on vehicle owners to prevent them from using their
cars
.
Thus
 a multi-pronged approach is needed to prevent
people
 from using
cars
. Punitive measures like vehicle
tax
, road
tax
, congestion
tax
 etc. should be levied and at the same time, excellent public
transport
 facilities should be created so that
people
 travel in them.
Also
, like the Delhi government, other governments too should run advertisement campaigns to
use
 public
transport
.
Thus
, with cooperation, there will be judicious
use
 of personal means of
transport
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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