Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes, and entertainment) is likely to result on a society of individuals who only think their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matter that affect them. Discuss both these view and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
children
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like to have their own opinion in their own clothes food or entertainment. Some
people
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hold that
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will let
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have a negative impact which only thinks about their own wishes while others think that
children
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should have their own
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and it is important for their future.
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essay discusses both views and my own opinion.
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, it is important that
children
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can have their own thought or
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and try to say them out loud to others. Communicating with their
parents
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or arguing with their
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to listen to their wishes is an important skill. If
children
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can make their decisions and let
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know what they like or dislike it will make their lives less pressured.
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, in my country
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use to take decisions by
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’s clothing or classes after school
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as piano class, math class or dancing class.
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, those
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who dislike these classes will feel pressure on learning those things, if
children
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can tell their wishes to
parents
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and try to make the decisions that affect themself, they might have a more likely and happy childhood.
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,
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who think that
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making their own choices might result in a society of individuals who only think their own wishes is not really connecting. Those
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who only think their own self in not because they make their own
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seen their childhood. It is due to their personality or their own living environment. In conclusion, it is not relative that make their own choices on everyday matters will let
children
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only think their own wishes in the future while in my ,opinion it is important to that child say out loud their whishes or
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because
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will make their life happier.
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