Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

technology
is something inevitable nowadays. in most
part
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of the globe, many
people
in
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productive ages
are
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work
from their own house. the behaviour of the adults
people
influence
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more pupils to
also
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tha
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the
same. they do their school activity from home because the
technology
become affordable in price and easy to access at the same time. in
this
essay, I will explain my perspective
why
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this
is a good development and elaborate
some
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reasons behind
this
phenomenon. in my opinion,
technology
changes
people
behaviour.
subsequently
,
the
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technology
also
drive
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the way
people
work
and the
study
method of
children
.
this
is a good movement. because
people
in
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every
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ages
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have a space to adjust their
work
and
study
demand into
they
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their
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activity
in
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daily
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a daily
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basis.
for example
, when
people
are
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work
at the office, they must put their toddler into
babycare
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institution.
nevertheless
, they spend more to pay
the
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babycare service. meanwhile, when they
work
from home, they can
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the task and care for
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they
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baby at the same time. according to the example, I do believe
technology
brings
positive
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impact. when we talk about the
children
and their school activity, I believe
study
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from home is a good way in order to make
children
keep focus and do not get bored. to illustrate, when one day the
children
are get
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bored
study
in their bedroom, the
next
day their parents can move
they
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laptop into
living
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room in order to give a new
ambiance
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for
children
's home-classroom.
in addition
,
this
fact
support
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my stance to see
technology
and flexibility are
positive
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development.
finally
,
technology
is a positive development. it gives
people
finished more than one responsibilities (
work
and family)
also
avoid the
children
from
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bored during their
study
class.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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