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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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technology
 is something inevitable nowadays. in most
part
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 of the globe, many
people
in
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 productive ages
are
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work
 from their own house. the behaviour of the adults
people
influence
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 more pupils to
also
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tha
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the
 same. they do their school activity from home because the
technology
 become affordable in price and easy to access at the same time. in
this
 essay, I will explain my perspective
why
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this
 is a good development and elaborate
some
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 reasons behind
this
 phenomenon. in my opinion,
technology
 changes
people
 behaviour.
subsequently
,
the
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technology
also
drive
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 the way
people
work
 and the
study
 method of
children
.
this
 is a good movement. because
people
in
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every
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ages
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 have a space to adjust their
work
 and
study
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they
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 activity
in
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on
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daily
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 basis.
for example
, when
people
are
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work
 at the office, they must put their toddler into
babycare
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 institution.
nevertheless
, they spend more to pay
the
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 babycare service. meanwhile, when they
work
 from home, they can
finished
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 the task and care for
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they
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 baby at the same time. according to the example, I do believe
technology
 brings
positive
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 impact. when we talk about the
children
 and their school activity, I believe
study
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 from home is a good way in order to make
children
 keep focus and do not get bored. to illustrate, when one day the
children
are get
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 bored
study
 in their bedroom, the
next
 day their parents can move
they
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 laptop into
living
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 room in order to give a new
ambiance
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 for
children
's home-classroom.
in addition
,
this
 fact
support
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 my stance to see
technology
 and flexibility are
positive
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 development.
finally
,
technology
 is a positive development. it gives
people
 finished more than one responsibilities (
work
 and family)
also
 avoid the
children
 from
get
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 bored during their
study
 class.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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