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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of areas such as fashion and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree?

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Some
people
 say that humans tend to copy ideas and material things from each other in sectors that are in trend right now
such
 as
clothings
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clothing
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 and general goods. While I believe that
people
 sometimes inspire
the
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ideas from each other, I do not think that they copy exactly from
one
 another. The
first
 reason for
this
 is due to the law and regulations of copyright. A lot of musicians, designers, artists and companies have the copyright and sole ownership of their own logos,
products
 and names so that no
one
 can steal from them.
For example
, the Apple company and Samsung company have
several
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 ongoing lawsuits against each other for several years due to similarities between their
products
.
Secondly
, every popular brand and designer has their own unique style and niche of their
products
 and the qualities that they only can offer to consumers.
Therefore
, I think most
people
 and
businessman
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businessmen
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 will try to avoid copying their competitors'
products
 to avoid facing lawsuits and to build their own herd of customers. Another reason is that humans are more likely to inspire
from
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one
 another rather than
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 the same from each other. In
fashion
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 industry,
for example
, there is a specific trend that
people
 follow at all times. So,
although
 the overall theme and design of the brands may feel similar to each other, after adding their own elements to the garments,
people
 will not feel the same about each company's
clothings
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clothing
items of clothing
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.
Moreover
, while some
people
 might steal another group's idea to manufacture goods and sell them for a cheaper price, customers will be able to differentiate the quality between the original than the dupe. When choosing an item to purchase, consumers will be more like to choose the
one
 that costs a little bit more but will probably
lasts
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 longer.
Hence
, even though there are some businesses that will produce identical
products
of
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 another, most of the
people
 will only take
inspirations
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inspiration
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 and try to upgrade the original design and ideas. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I think that the rates of human
being
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beings
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 copying each other in industries
such
 as fashion and other departments are quite low.
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