The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

There is no doubt that pupils need to be ready for the future

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which is a core responsibility of the educational

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. There are many people who think removing the cultural

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from the syllabus ensure technological study.

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and mathematics

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more impact on the modern era rather than cultural subjects and I tend to

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find mechanization around us.

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sector

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already going to

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universe.

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sector huge developed by technology and after that they are completed many critical

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successfully.

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for entertainment and its do not help in

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main

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for our students, it will be more improve our children technological knowledge.

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one

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of the

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modern era, and behind in

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is engineering

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it is possible.

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technology.

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him after 18 years later by Facebook.

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are developing

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our communication

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study.

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creative activity; which is come from by born. That's why I think no need to educational study all of

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creativity. The result of

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is, in which direction going on our future

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definetly

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our child with that education.

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passional which get by birth, and which is we use only for

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huge revolution by technology.

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, our children get more

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knowledge when

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cultural

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