The role of education is to prepare children for the modern world. School should cut art and music out of the curriculum so that children can focus on useful subjects such as information technology. To what extent do you agree?

There is no doubt that pupils need to be ready for the future

world

which is a core responsibility of the educational

system

. There are many people who think removing the cultural

subject

from the syllabus ensure technological study.

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,

science

and mathematics

subject

more impact on the modern era rather than cultural subjects and I tend to

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science

,

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when we think

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to use time perfectly and effectively,

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sector

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already going to

tech

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universe.

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medical

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sector huge developed by technology and after that they are completed many critical

operation

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successfully.

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, cultural activity

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for entertainment and its do not help in

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not add

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syllabus

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main

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for our students, it will be more improve our children technological knowledge.

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,

communication

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system

one

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of the

mejor

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revolution in

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modern era, and behind in

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is engineering

science

. Nowadays, when we

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it is possible.

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already

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grow

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technology.

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him after 18 years later by Facebook.

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,

scientist

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are developing

many

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kind

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of

satellite

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which

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our communication

system

, and importantly which

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for

mathematics

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study.

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, art

as well as music

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are

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creative activity; which is come from by born. That's why I think no need to educational study all of

students

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for

this

creativity. The result of

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is, in which direction going on our future

world

definetly

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try to

growing

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our child with that education.

Finally

, cultural activities

is

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passional which get by birth, and which is we use only for

entertent

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entertain

, while actual

world

huge revolution by technology.

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, our children get more

science

knowledge when

eliminate

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cultural

subject

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from

education

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system

.