Some people think government should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems to help prevent illness and diseas. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The line graph above illustrates the average number of
passengers
which
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who
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use
London
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the London
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Underground
Station
in a day. Overall, the chart indicates that the
station
is open from 6 am in the morning to 10 pm
in
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at
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the
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apply
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night. There are two peak times that show a considerable number of
passengers
, whereas some intervals show a few
people
. The
most busy
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time
is at 7 am in the morning. There are around 400
passengers
which enter the
station
at
this
time
.
Moreover
, another peak
time
is in the evening. Around 380
people
visit the
station
at 6 pm.
On the other hand
, 4 pm is
a
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the
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time
which displays the lowest number of
passengers
. Under 100
people
use the
station
at
this
time
.
In addition
, in the early morning (6 am), around 100
people
use the
station
which
only
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slighly
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slightly
different compared to the lowest point.
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