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In the future, more people will choose to go on a holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday Do you agree or disagree?

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It is a well-known fact that
people
 tend to
travel
 around the world to spend their holidays rather than visiting their native land.
Although
,
this
 is not an agreeable situation for the future I am going to explain my view on that point from
this
 essay. With the new ,pandemic most of the society was reluctant to
travel
 around, even within their own land.
Moreover
, most of the countries were have set
travel
 bans for foreigners. Scientists have proven that there will be more pandemics in the future. Because of
this
 reason
travel
 around the world will get restricted and most of the
people
 tried to spend their holidays within their own
country
.
Nevertheless
, if someone travels to another
country
 the spending the person is doing during his tours
such
 as air tickets, hotel charges and taxi fares will be a good income for the
country
 they
travel
 to.
This
 means the money will flow to another
country
 from the native land. In fact, if
people
 try to do their spending on their own
country
this
 money will reside and it will be a benefit for their own economy.
This
 will encourage the government to build more attractions and services to ease the day-to-day life of the
people
. One good example is, the highways built in Sri Lanka recently, which ease travelling within the
country
 in a shorter time than in the past. To conclude, it is speculated that most
people
 will love to
travel
 to their own
country
 rather than travelling abroad. As a whole, I agree with
this
 statement as we need to explore our own
country
 since there are a huge number of places that we can not cover within our lifetime and we must
also
 need to try to preserve the revenue in our own nation
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
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