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Now a days many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?Has this become a positive or negative development ?

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In the present era of science and technology,the way
people
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 interact with each other has changed a lot.
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 ways of relationship making have
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 been revolutionised and to find out it is beneficial or harmful is difficult as it is in a transition period but , the
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 paragraphs will elaborate on the issue in detail and try to find out which way it is moving. Invent of smartphones and the internet has radically changed the way of
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's interact from physical to the majority of instances only digital interaction.
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 the type of relationship has been changed to casual in most of the cases ,
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 staying away from long term relationships as it is boring and burdensome for most of the candidates,social bondings are becoming weaker and weaker over time.some years before there was a trend of nuclear families now changed to single families as the tolerance of
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 went down and they want to live their own life without any disturbances or obligations.
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, a person-centred
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 takes place
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 of a family-oriented
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 where family bonding and family values have much to do with the person in shaping their life. Those single-family houses carry responsibilities on single shoulders if any problem with the family will be broken as there is no one around to talk or for support and there will be a tremendous psychological,financial and physical burden which is a negative outcome of newer development. Fewer physical interaction makes
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 introverted, moody and emotionally labile which in long run make them psychologically unstable.
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 single families are in no position to raise the
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 generation so, there will be a loss of
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 in total. In ,conclusion modern technologies and their effects are disadvantageous for
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 and individuals ,so scientists and experts from
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 advise limited use of technologies in social relationships and adhere to old family values for a better and balanced
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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