Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a group of
people
think
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who think
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that losing specific species of trees and animals is the main environmental
issue
, whereas others believe that there are more urgent environmental
problems
which should be solved. Personally, I'm more concerned about other
problems
because losing
living
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a living
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organism is a result
from
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of
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those
problems
.
However
,
this
essay will discuss both
of
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beliefs.
To begin
with,
extinction
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the extinction
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of plants and animals is one of the highest priority
issue
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issues
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. Losing a plant might mean
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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of many wildlife's habitats.
Consequently
, some animals will die out.
This
will break food chains which will destroy an ecosystem.
For example
,
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the disappearing
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disappearing
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of underwater seaweeds makes many fishes lose their home. The number of small fishes
decrease
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decreases
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considerably because they can not hide from predators. But
this
circumstance is the effect
from
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of
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other severe environmental
problems
. If
people
can fix those
problems
the
extinction
problem will slightly
occurs
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.
On the other hand
, there are many other
problems
that should be fixed before solving an
extinction
problem. These
problems
play an important role
of
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environmental
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an environmental
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issue
and it is the main cause of disappearing living organism.
Moreover
,
this
type of
problems
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problem
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will destroy
the
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humankind.
For instance
, global warming is
the
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an
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issue
that
people
have encountered. In the
next
20 years, if the temperature is still raised at the current rate. The human can not live anymore. To summarise, while many
people
concerned
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are concerned
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about
extinction
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the extinction
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of plants and
wildlifes
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wildlife
, other
problems
need attention.
Problems
such
as global warming are the cause of many environmental
problems
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including
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extinction
. In my opinion, global warming should be given the
first
priority. If we can solve
this
problem, we can continue to fix other
problems
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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