Some people feel that entertainers (eg. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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It is argued that really famous people like films stars, pop musicians and
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sports stars are got extremely huge amounts of payments more than they are actually deserved by some sort of public. I totally agree with
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statement and give some evidence to
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argument,
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consider on professions which should be paid more than they are used to.
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with, in a real it is totally true that a sort of community who has big fame around the whole world are earned a lot of money. These types of people particularly earn
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kind of huge money due to the different factors.
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and foremost, businesses are ready to pay
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kind of big cash for them for working together.
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: making an agreement to make advertisements for these firms to increase their number of sales or popularity in the markets.
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, it is an incredibly valuable opportunity for businesses to make their customers be more loyal to
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company or brand.
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, there are other types of employments that are deserved to earn more salaries than they are getting now. Because these kinds of jobs are deeply connected with a high risk
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to themselves and are really beneficial to communities. Great examples of these jobs are doctors and firefighters. They always work hard to help their populations without any danger to die. Because even in the pandemic conditions they worked with the chance of dying from the covid.
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, the same with firefighters. They always start their activities from early mornings with the understanding that
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day can be the
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they exist. In my opinion, despite giving a lot of funds to the famous sort of public with the advantages of increasing businesses, it should be paid more checks to our hero people who work under peril
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as doctors and firefighters as mentioned.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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