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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this case? do you think this is a postive or negative situation? write at least 250 words.

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It is said that ownership of the home has greater value than living on a lease. In a few nations,
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 because government support them and the working population is trying to make their retirement safe by investing in
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 assets. I believe, having
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 is beneficial and
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 it is always a plus point. In some nations, citizens are buying apartments
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, they can live in the same apartment for rent. One cause for
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 is, That
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 are looking for ways for an
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 of the money they earn. Working individuals make investments through which they are securing their as well as their family's future.
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, in some nations
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 support citizens to have ownership of the
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 they live in.
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- in Singapore, more than 80% population live in their own houses than renting
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 is because countries policies help them. I believe if they can have a chance and capacity to do an
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 in real estate one should always go for it.
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, the own
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 gives a feeling of stability. In the case of rented houses, tenants can change the rent or if there is any problem with the
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 can detrimental effects on the psychology of individuals. Considering the pandemic, we have seen how
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 lost their jobs and have to leave the
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. In conclusion, I believe it is always a positive option to have a safe
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 in real estate. In some
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 emphasis on buying property than going for rented ones is always a good thing.
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