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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this case? do you think this is a postive or negative situation? write at least 250 words.

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It is said that ownership of the home has greater value than living on a lease. In a few nations,
people
 buy
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house
 because government support them and the working population is trying to make their retirement safe by investing in
such
 assets. I believe, having
such
 an
investment
 is beneficial and
thus
 it is always a plus point. In some nations, citizens are buying apartments
although
, they can live in the same apartment for rent. One cause for
this
 is, That
people
 are looking for ways for an
investment
 of the money they earn. Working individuals make investments through which they are securing their as well as their family's future.
Moreover
, in some nations
government
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 support citizens to have ownership of the
house
 they live in.
For example
- in Singapore, more than 80% population live in their own houses than renting
this
 is because countries policies help them. I believe if they can have a chance and capacity to do an
investment
 in real estate one should always go for it.
Furthermore
, the own
house
 gives a feeling of stability. In the case of rented houses, tenants can change the rent or if there is any problem with the
house
,
this
 can detrimental effects on the psychology of individuals. Considering the pandemic, we have seen how
people
 lost their jobs and have to leave the
house
. In conclusion, I believe it is always a positive option to have a safe
investment
 in real estate. In some
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people
 emphasis on buying property than going for rented ones is always a good thing.
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