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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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University
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students
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 these days tend to study in different
countries
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. Some
people
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 believe
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 situation can cause a lot of issues in our society. In my view, we have to focus more on
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 side of
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 trend. On the one hand,to improve the
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’s facilities
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 as hospitals or government systems, modern society needs a lot of
people
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 who have advanced knowledge and useful
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, and it is true that
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 only can learn
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 in
university
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 courses.
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, if the
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students
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 leave their
countries
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, the community will struggle with a lack of workers.
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, in
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 case, the government has to bring other
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'
university
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students
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 to increase workers,
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, it has to invest a lot of money in various aspects,
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, payment of
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foreign
 workers and increase of health care fee.
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, it is true that each
country
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 has different levels of
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 and
technology
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 and for advanced
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,
people
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 have to share their knowledge and ideas together.
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, many parts that came from various
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such
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 as Korea, the USA and China are used for smartphone manufacturing.
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, if the
students
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 study in different
countries
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, they can learn different
skills
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 and new types of ideas to utilise in their
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's daily lives.
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, the quality and level of the
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's
skills
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 and
technology
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 will improve with the
students
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 who studied in other
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 through sharing ideas. In conclusion,
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 the local community and the
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 might face some social issues, I believe the
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 can improve their
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technology
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 and
skills
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 with
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 trend.
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