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It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is a common thought that having a lot of unclosing friends is worse than having a real friendship with someone. From my perspective, I completely agree with
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 and foremost, people can be true of them which means that there is not necessary to mould themselves as ideal models to please others.
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, a true
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 can accept and understand the whole of us including the negative parts.
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, the relationship with acquaintances is fragile.
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, they might believe rumours from someone who hates us and break up the friendship. The public often pretends they like something in order to get along with other individuals well. Some people tend to hide their true selves to join the groups so that they could become
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 part of the group.
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, with a close
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, we can be real ourselves freely and remove fake masks.
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, owning a relationship with the
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 who knows you well is an important thing in our life. The role of a true
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 could take part in many special events of our long life and function the same as our families do. Even if there is a serious fight between each other, a strong friendship would never separate because they would still forgive and get back to each other at the end. In conclusion, though having
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 true
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 only has pros and cons, it is still worth making
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friend
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 like that. After all, other individuals might not care about our thoughts and emotions, no matter we are in grieve or happiness.
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