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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
In the
last
 few years, Technology
have
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 witnessed a rapid
developement
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development
, which
make
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 a lot of
peolpe
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people
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internet
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 easier than
the
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 past. Many people claim that printed media will no longer be needed as the fast and
accessable
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accessible
internet
news
, While opponents of
this
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mountain
maintain
news paper
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newspaper
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 should
be keep
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 as tradition cause its unique
benefits
The online
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news
are
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 likely to bring people
with
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many
benefits
.
First
, reading
news
in
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on
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 the
internet
 is
a
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free of charge activity because many blogs and websites provide
news
 with no fees.
This
 is can be
explainned
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explained
 by
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a company
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company
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companies
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 who put advertisements on their websites can make their own profit.
Therefore
 by providing free service online, both
customer
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customers
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 and businesses can
benefits
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by
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this
.
Additionally
,
subcribers
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subscribers
 can access
to
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news
 whenever and wherever they want to via many measures,
such
 as their email or apps so that they don’t have to store papers as usual. Another advantage of
this
 is
news
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newsreader
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reader
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readers
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 can have the
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latest
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lastest
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latest
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news
 since reporters needn’t print it on
papers
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paper
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 and deliver it to people.
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other hand
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, printed media should be maintained for many reasons.
For instance
,
elderly
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the elderly
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 who find it hard to use or to keep on with the fast
news
 tend to choose printed
newspaper
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newspapers
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.
Some
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 places
in
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which has no
internet
 connection locals prefer using printed
news
 rather than
online
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an online
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 one .
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, reading a piece of paper gives
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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 a good feeling and easier to
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remember
 events which they read In conclusion, The
benefits
 of online media
outweights
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outweighs
it
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its
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counterpart
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counterparts
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 by providing
subcribers
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subscribers
accessable
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accessible
 and free services.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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