Q. some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that
people
have been living with their own lifestyle
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modern society. Some
people
say that it is significantly vital for private and public aspects to enjoy
present
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the present
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life
. In my opinion,
i
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absolutely disagree with
argument
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the argument
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above.
In
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this
essay,
this
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will discuss why all
espects
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aspects
respects
like the public and all nations should make a plan for the
future
. For private sectors, having a scheme for the
future
can lead to a stable later
life
. Not only the living cost has seriously been skyrocketing ten years ago, but
also
the
life
expectancy is significantly higher than
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before. Unfortunately, the figure of
average
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wage is similar to that in the past.
That is
why steadily setting aside money can help them to lead a better
life
instead
of just for being satisfied a present
life
. For a national aspect, building a plan for the public can protect
human
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humans
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from being
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several
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risky fields. All countries have been seriously put in exhausting limited
energy
resources. Scientists have announced that we will no longer have any
energy
to substitute power within 5 years. They
also
strongly recommend that the government should develop diverse natural alternative
energy
such
as solar and wind.
In other words
, setting a scheme to develop environmental
energy
which is much cheaper than fossil fuel can aid
people
to reduce a sense of anxiety related to
burden
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the burden
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of living
cost
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and natural
disaster
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disasters
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. In conclusion, while
people
prefer to
pursuit
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their distinct lifestyle, building a goal for the
future
is beneficial for
people
to live in better quality regardless of accumulating wealth.
Furthermore
, when it comes to nations,
this
is able to assist natural disasters to be disappeared through developing environmental
energy
and
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national competitiveness. Eventually, both of them are better to have a plan for the
future
.
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