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Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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In today's modern world, We could see that people are depleting natural
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 like plants and animals in the name of modernization. Some people think that we have only less possibility of chances of restoring our planet and
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, there are other contradictory thoughts as well among people. We will discuss both views in the following paragraphs. Industrialization is one of the extensive reasons for exploiting trees and animals. Most of the industries are located in rural areas and
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 they spoil the water sources nearby by releasing toxic chemicals in them.
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, It affects the animals while it drinks
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 contaminated water and
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, The trees and plants are
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 affected by the chemical gases which are sent out of these industries. Factories are the major source of economic growth and the government will not consider restricting them.
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, we see temperatures are very high nowadays when compared to older days. On the flip side, There are several environmentalists in society who join with NGO's to reverse the unfair treatment of our natural
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 and
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 they have been working towards educating safe alternate ways to release factory wastes. In
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 way, we can gain our water
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 and any damage to our green coverage can be protected. In conclusion, I would like to pen down my opinion that we have come a long way from the high chance of fixing our economy to fewer chances. ,
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 as we see a major transformation in the technology space, we can use find ways to identify the problems which are more concerning and
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 try fixing them
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 hand.
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 will slowly revive our planet earth and its
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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