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Home Schooling has become very popular in recent years. However, most people still believe that attending schools is the best way to obtain formal education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of home-schooling?

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It cannot be denied that in recent years teaching online has become in trend. Most people still accept that offline learning is the best approach to earn structured education. In my viewpoint
home schooling
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 has its own benefits as well as drawbacks. The pros and cons are discussed
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. Discussing the gains the most obvious one is they can learn effectively with the use of
internet
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 at no single cost. nowadays due to technological advancement pupils learn through mobile phones or
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laptops
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such
 applications
like
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 zoom and education portal.
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 reward is children have longer hours to study.
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student
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going
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 to school
everyday
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 at 8 o'clock and
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 back at around 5 o'clock
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 they
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 time to
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 work
such
 as reading or doing exercises so that with study at
home
 can gives more time for
further
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lessons
sessions
.
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 there are
few
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 detriments too.
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with
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 they
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forgot
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 been taught by teachers. Regular learning at
home
 become resulted in children
lazyness
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laziness
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of
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 doing
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the activity
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activity
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Moreover
 teaching with gadgets are
distraction
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 in their study.
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example
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 of
juvenile
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 they do not focus while
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 but they
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 it as a form of entertainment and
watching
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playing
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 games and so on. All in
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 it can be eventually commented that
home schooling
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 is quite advantageous for learners but it should be noted that it
also
 brings
few
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 challenges. In my perception teaching at
academic
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 institution is the best way
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improve
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congitive
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cognitive
 skills and along with
better
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a better
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 understanding of the students.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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