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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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The major issue of the
environment
 nowadays is the extinction of flora and fauna, and losing particularly biodiversity has affected the sustainability of the ecosystem. While many researchers reckon that
pollution
 residue has influenced substantial environmental problems. I will provide the main arguments of both sides and argue that the waste of factory emission is more convincing, especially in terms of the huge impact on the
environment
. The central argument against the idea of the manufactory emission could bring serious detrimental effects to the ecosystems,
as a result
 of unawareness from the company.The
drawbacks
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 of
this
 is that the
imbalance
 condition to the several
range
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ranges
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 of ecosystems, ranging from air, water, and soil
pollution
.
This
 is because of the vast range of
pollution
 affecting the declining number of
megabiodiversity
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mega biodiversity
,
such
 as endemic species of plants and animals.
For instance
, a survey conducted by World
Environment
 Health provided data that 65% of problems in the
environment
 are caused by manufactory
pollution
 Admittedly, loss of particular species biodiversity could be the main environmental matter today, it could be impacted by an
imbalance
 of the food chain that might cause a huge impact in the future involving difficulty finding food.The
imbalance
 of plants and animals could affect the stabilization of the ecosystems.
However
, biodiversity loss has resulted from the
long- term
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 effect of resource depletion. In fact,
a
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research conducted by Harvard University revealed that 75% of the extinction of endemic species in Indonesia was caused by the diverse
pollution
 from the textile industry. To conclude,
although
 plants and animals' loss might affect an
imbalance
 of the food chain, considering the direct impact on the
environment
, the
pollution
 of the factory should be considered the current main environmental problem

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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