You are living in a city in a foreign country, and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit you for several days. Write an email to your friend, asking him or her to bring some things from home which you need saying why you need them making arrangements to meet Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’
Dear James
Hi, How have you been these days? I've been travelling to other countries.
I heard that you are going to visit here. So I'd like to ask you to bring some Korean typical food
such
as Kimchi, gochujang and all that jazz that is
needed to cook Korean dishes. As I know, you are going to visit the city next to my home. If let me know when you visit exactly, I'm also
going to go airport in the city. With that said, how about going to some tourist attractions? I've been to the city as well. Therefore
I can afford I'll let you take hidden gems and uncrowded restaurants. If you like drinking coffee, I'd like to go to the cafe, which has a beautiful view and also
sells wonderful cakes.
I wanted to go with you when I visited for the first time.
Best Regards.Submitted by eee159789 on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly by separating them into distinct paragraphs. For example, start a new paragraph when discussing meeting arrangements.
Task Achievement
Provide a bit more detail about why you need each item from home. This could enhance the completeness of your response.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and friendly, setting a good tone for the letter.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is warm and engaging, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite