Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life?

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Nowadays, usage of social
media
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and news
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channels
are playing
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role in making any individual infamous. Becoming popular comes with a lot of responsibility and risk. In
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I will discuss my views on the effects of
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coverage on famous people.
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, let us discuss the positive side of
media
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. Currently, most people use mobile devices to consume any form of
media
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.
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makes many
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talented
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individual
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to
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show their abilities.
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month, I have observed that one guy with singing
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and a good voice became very popular in youth. Anyone can post a video
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just one click of a button. The journey from
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person to a famous individual might not be easy,
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however
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the road after becoming
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is
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bumpy.
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, on the other side,
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fame comes with a price. It is very difficult for anyone to maintain the image of
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themselves
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them selves
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on social
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imagine you are being watched 24*7 and
every one
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is judging you for your behaviour, things you are doing in your routine personal life.
Media
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coverage
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breaches the fundamental law of privacy.
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, it
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adds up many things just to increase the view count of
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fake news.
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year, a singer in the name of Pooja was trolled for rude behaviour in public. She has to go
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thorough
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a lot of troubles and
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apologise
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, just to through
an anger
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in front of a
camara
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camera
. To sum up, I would say, anybody pointing a
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camera
shoud
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should
be a responsible person. It may happen that someday you will be famous and at that time you have to
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bear
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bare
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the cost of privacy
for
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remain in the
media
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coverage.
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