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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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Humans struggle with choosing something during their lifetime is obvious. It is believed that nowadays we have a
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 of
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 and I agree. Nowadays there are a
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 of
choices
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 that
people
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 can choose, and I agree and it is a result of an enormous amount of information which transfer all over the world and the way that
people
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 can reach
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 data. Nowadays with the help of the internet information is easily transferred all over the places and
people
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 can access all these just by one click from their home.
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, a person who lives in the United States of America can search all shopping centres in another continent with his laptop throughout the internet. While in the past
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 hardly accommodates their needs due to the lack of
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, nowadays
people
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 can easily fulfil their needs with the internet by several options. Other points that can be considered are
foods
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.
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, in the past,
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 hardly find a restaurant in their city and
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 they prefer to eat homemade
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 but in comparison with the past, nowadays
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 have access to different restaurants and fast
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 and take away facilities to offer them several
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.
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, there are a
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 of new devices than in the past that can help
people
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 to make different
foods
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 in their home.
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, microwaves and toasters and electrical ovens give a number of
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 to their users. It is clear that
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 have more entertainments’
choices
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 than before.
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, television provides an enormous amount of programs that can be seen in different categories
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 as sports, movies, music and documentary. Video and board games
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 are inventions that should be considered as a new choice of entertainment which do not exist in the past. In conclusion,
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 in
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 era have a
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 of
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 than
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 in the past and make their lives easier than before.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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