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SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT A GOOD DIET AND EXERCISE ARE NOT NECESSARY FOR A HEALTH AND LONG LIFE. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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A set of
people
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 argue that regular exercise and maintaining a good
diet
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 is not important to keep fit. I totally disagree with the statement because
that is
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 the only way to a healthy lifestyle.
Firstly
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, the Majority of humans focus on their fitness and some of them have very busy schedules but they somehow manage their time for their
exercises
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 because they believe, doing regular
exercises
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, which is the most important habit and the easiest way to keep fit.
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, in my hometown, all of the
people
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 do their
exercises
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 in the morning and the evening. they used to visit the lake of "Parakkrama Samudraya" for their
exercises
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 because that place has massive beauty and it
also
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 helps them with their mental
health
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.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 follow
diet
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 plans for their
health
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.As far as
i
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concerned
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that is
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 the most important thing for everyone who lives in the universe because it helps a lot of diseases that infected us and
also
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 it helps our body to keep fit.For
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instant, the majority of famous
people
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 do that for their
health
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. Some of them do not eat any meal from restaurants or hotels because they used to make their meal for themself. In the point of my view, make our own food in our home which is the most fascinating thing because if we make our
diet
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 with ourselves we know everything about our meal and every ingredient we added to that. So
that is
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 very important. A lot of
people
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 follow
diet
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 plans for their physical fitness. To conclude, the majority of mankind do regular
exercises
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 and follow
diet
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 plans because that helps a lot for them to maintain their physical
health
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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