SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT A GOOD DIET AND EXERCISE ARE NOT NECESSARY FOR A HEALTH AND LONG LIFE. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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A set of
people
argue that regular exercise and maintaining a good
diet
is not important to keep fit. I totally disagree with the statement because
that is
the only way to a healthy lifestyle.
Firstly
, the Majority of humans focus on their fitness and some of them have very busy schedules but they somehow manage their time for their
exercises
because they believe, doing regular
exercises
, which is the most important habit and the easiest way to keep fit.
For example
, in my hometown, all of the
people
do their
exercises
in the morning and the evening. they used to visit the lake of "Parakkrama Samudraya" for their
exercises
because that place has massive beauty and it
also
helps them with their mental
health
.
On the other hand
,
people
follow
diet
plans for their
health
.As far as
i
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concerned
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that is
the most important thing for everyone who lives in the universe because it helps a lot of diseases that infected us and
also
it helps our body to keep fit.For
an
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instant, the majority of famous
people
do that for their
health
. Some of them do not eat any meal from restaurants or hotels because they used to make their meal for themself. In the point of my view, make our own food in our home which is the most fascinating thing because if we make our
diet
with ourselves we know everything about our meal and every ingredient we added to that. So
that is
very important. A lot of
people
follow
diet
plans for their physical fitness. To conclude, the majority of mankind do regular
exercises
and follow
diet
plans because that helps a lot for them to maintain their physical
health
.
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