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Some schools start teaching a foreign language in primary school years. Do the advantages of teaching foreign languages to young children outweigh its disadvantages?

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In the world, there are numerous languages used in each country.
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, it is believed that some schools should start teaching a foreign
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 in primary school. Some people think that it may cause some disadvantages for young
children
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 but I think it has many advantages for them. One of the drawbacks of teaching a foreign
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 to young learners at the primary-education level is wasting time.
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, they might not have time to entertain or relax and more important is the time to study other subjects may be less which reduces the balance in
children
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’s learning.
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, Learning a foreign
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 is more expensive than other subjects, and some parents cannot afford it, not to mention having to hire more tutors to tutor their
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 or go to other
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.
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, foreign
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 learning in primary school has its perk, there
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 some useful activities interspersed with learning
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 as team building, raising hands to speak, etc., so young
children
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 not only have the opportunity to learn new languages but
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 can be active, make many friends and learn about different cultures. Not only that,
children
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's tuition fees are often used to pay for native teachers, which helps young people approach the
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 properly, and
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 helps
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 practice correct pronunciation right from the start. Hiring a tutor or studying at a
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 depends on the economic ability of each family, but it supports
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 to acquire more useful knowledge. In conclusion, I find that the fact that some schools start teaching foreign languages in primary schools brings more benefits than disadvantages.
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