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the charts show the souces of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting the main features,and make comparision where relevant

the charts show the souces of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting the main features,and make comparision where relevant
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The given chart illustrates the popularity of different sources generating electricity in 4 distinctive nations between the years 2003 and 2008.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that nuclear was just recorded in
India
 and
Sweden
while
 fossil
fuel
 and
hydropower
 were quite popular in all countries.
Besides
, nuclear made up relatively a tiny fraction compared to others. There was an existence of 3 categories in
India
 and
Sweden
. To be more detailed, the percentage of nuclear made up 4% which was ten times less than that in
Sweden
.
On the contrary
, there was a significant rate of 82% of fossil
fuel
 in
India
, which was 78% larger than that proportion in
Sweden
. Regarding the
last
 sector, the figure for
hydropower
 took up half of the total produced energy in
Sweden
 in comparison with about a tenth (14%) of the produced power in
India
. There was an absence of nuclear in Morocco and Viet Nam. Specifically, in Morroco, the rate of electricity generated from
hydropower
 contributed to 95%
while
 that of fossil
fuel
 was only responsible for 5% which was far smaller than the former. In terms of Viet Nam, there was an equilibrium between
two
Correct article usage
the two
show examples
 sections, with the percentage of electricity produced from
hydropower
 being at 44% and that index of fossil
fuel
 being at 56%.
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