Some people think that mobile phones are harmful for children,while others disagree.Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Nowadays the technology has been developed and mobile phones are allocated to more heir. On

this

kind of ,occasion some believe it is ok but others belief is, it brings some disadvantages which I totally agree with the

second

group. The

first

group, supposed mobile phones could be so beneficial which entertain the kids well

such

as, various kind of graphical applications and games,

moreover

, the mobile phone could have a great impact on their communication skills,

for instance

, by the online games they able to communicate with each other.

Furthermore

, a beneficial educating application has been provided by a mobile call up, so it can influence their educational knowledge

such

as some mathematical apps or different kinds of school programs.

On the other hand

, the

second

groups believe in harmful of phones for heir which, I totally agree with

this

statement in order to if the parents have not any limitation of using the call up of their children, it leads to bad attitudes,

for example

, the internet is full of harmful contents for illegal ages especially under 18. These kinds of content have a harmful impact on children brains and tackle their mental health. In spite of it can be

such

entertainment, but, it makes scion more extroverted persons and harms their public social skills. in conclusion, despite all the advantages from the persons who agree with unlimited usage of mobile call up by scion, in my point of view, is a fact that the disadvantages are more and it is so harmful to children.

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0Word repetition
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0Grammar mistakes
 

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257 words

7.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

excessive screen time
health problems
eye strain
poor posture
disrupted sleep patterns
inappropriate content
addiction
reliance
impair
social skills
educational tools
digital literacy
mitigated
parental guidance
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