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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

There are different types of achievements in someone’s life
such
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 as graduation, finding a good opportunity, and so on.
Also
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, living in an own
house
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 is more important than living in another person’s
house
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 for lease. I personally believe that having a
house
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 has not only positive benefits but
also
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 negative factors with it. On one hand, having your own
house
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 save
money
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 because these days renting a
house
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 is very expensive so it is not an investment for the future and total waste of
money
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.
Furthermore
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, living in another person’s
house
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 is stressful for persons who are renting and it is a serious case if they have children. If children break something or draw something on the wall, definitely they have to fine to the
house
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 owner.
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, when I lived in a rented
house
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, I paid extra
money
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 for cupboard damage which was broken by me.
On the other hand
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, owning a
house
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 needs lots of
money
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 which every person can’t afford within a small time. So, most of the persons try to get a mortgage from the financial institution by showing their monthly income as a pledge. It makes huge uncertainty about the family future because people have to save a lot of
money
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 from monthly income for an instalment of the mortgage.
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, the maintenance cost which should allocate for repairing the
house
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 is
also
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 high. ,
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 it is difficult to move to another
area
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 for any reason if we settled in one
area
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.
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, some permanent residents disfavour to move to another
area
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, even though that
area
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 has disasters. To conclude, there are some positives and negatives to having own
house
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. So personally I believe that it is important to live happily without thinking about where we live.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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