Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days, exploring the world of learning through
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has been beneficial for students to provide a conducive environment of education. Some individuals
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that learning in
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is not essential anymore due to the demand
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advanced technology wherein they replace the approach of learning via
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. I strongly disagree with that notion because there are numerous consequences that could affect the welfare and well-being of the young and old learners to achieve their respective educational growth and profession in the future.
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detrimental effect to the profession among teachers, tutors and other
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in the
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. Learning
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by your own self with the use of
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could create
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vast confusion and despair. As we know, majority of the people rely on computers and mobile phones to navigate facts and information but still the quality of interaction,education and engagement are limited and
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insubstantial
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, after we got hit by
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pandemic the
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were suspended for how many days that lead to uncertainty by providing modules and lectures online via zoom to promote a new strategy to able to cope
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the missed
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, the
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made the whole learning
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different where it makes
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student
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get bored and uninterested
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the subject matter that could
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their grades and performance.
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, there are vast uncertain thoughts about learning via
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ambiguous and imperfect in some ways. As we tackled the perilous journey of students to gain knowledge by depending on
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somehow we questioned ourselves if
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information are genuine and legit to justify the answers to our problem. In my opinion, there are many ways to improve learning by grabbing information
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the library, compromising discussions with tutors,especially from our
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home, in
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the
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that nurture our being.
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, we should not jeopardize the old-fashioned way because not all can navigate the pure essence of learning.
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, the advantage of learning via
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is accessible and convenient to anyone who wants to learn
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their own way. There are
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individuals who do not have access
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education due to lack of financial support so they rely
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free online
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classes
or any platforms that are essential to support their personal growth and mentality.
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,youtube is one of
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internet
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websites that covers a wide range of interactive learning and entertainment. To conclude, the
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brought a phenomenal
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in our lives
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for aspiring students in
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world,
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,I strongly believe that we should not disregard the value of actual
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in the
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whereas the government and the family must imply awareness, guide and support to their people for a better pathway of learning.
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