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Today's teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generations. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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Despite a continuing improvement in the standard of living, many people believe that young people suffer more
stress
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 than older generations. In
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 essay, the arguments surrounding the issue of teenage
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 will be discussed.
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,
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 are exposed to more products than earlier generations
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 of living in a modern consumer society. Through films and the media, they see celebrities with expensive jewellery, clothes and cars.
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, youth-oriented advertising gives them an awareness of the latest technology
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 as digital music formats and mobile phones.
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,
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 feel pressure to acquire these items. Some might argue that these pressures are not new.
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, I believe that
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 stresses were not so strong during earlier times. It could
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 be argued that pressures at school are stronger than before. In order to achieve the lifestyle they see in the media,
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 must succeed in their studies so they can compete for the best jobs. Parental pressure, examinations and homework are all reported as causing increased levels of strain.
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 it may be true to say that modern society produces certain stresses it does not necessarily mean that
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 was previously absent. In earlier times, hunger and physical discomfort would undoubtedly have caused high levels of anxiety, as would hard physical labour,
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, working down a mine. Any balanced view must take into account these alternative factors. To sum up, consumerism and academic pressures are powerful causes of
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 on today's
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.
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, it is my view that these stresses are no greater than those experienced by earlier generations of
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