Some people say that music is good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I strongly agree with the statement. I believe that
music
can unify people from different sides of the globe and from all ages. To show that, nowadays, Korean Pop
Music
is popular globally and people from different countries follow
this
trend, even though they
are not speak
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nor understand
Korean
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the Korean
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languange
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language
at all. A community of
a
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Korean Pop
musician
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or usually called 'fandom' gather to support their favourite,
although
they came from a completely different background. In my opinion,
music
is one of
a
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communication
tools
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. Musicians always make their
music
with the intention to express their feeling,
such
as
,
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anger, sadness, joy, and many more.
Hence
, people who listen to their
music
can feel the same and
became
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attached to the
music
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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