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Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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In the era of modernisation, wild
animals
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 are on the verge of extinction. Individuals think that a huge amount of
time
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 and
money
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 should spend on the conservation of wild
animals
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. I strongly agree that governments should pay attention to the protection of wild
animals
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.
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, the government is more likely to spend
time
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 and
money
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 to invest in
military
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 and urban sprawl that harm wild
animals
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. Wild
animals
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 do not have too much place to stay or build their house since the governments spend
time
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 and
money
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 on the concrete jungle.
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, deforestation, global warming is the most factor that harms heavily to wild
animals
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.
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, protecting wild
animals
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 means protecting their habitats like rainforests and oceans. If not, climate change will alter our food supply when overpopulation still continues.
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, there will be a shortage of food unless they solve
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 problem as soon as possible.
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, wild
animals
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 are on the verge of extinction because of human effects. Since global warming, war affects directly vegetation that wild
animals
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 usually live in. The rapid increase of urbanization harm the environment and precious breed of wild
animals
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.
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, the action makes some wild
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 extinct completely and lack a place to live.
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, people establish ecotourism destinations in order to prevent endangered species from poaching. The responsibility of
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 is creating more jobs for the people
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 as biotechnology or environment protection industry. In conclusion, individuals need to act infinitesimal to protect wild
animals
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. The government play an important role in the conservation of wild
animals
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 by spending
time
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 and
money
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 to protect wild
animals
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.
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