Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others are of the opinion that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
Many viewers hold divergent opinions on the difference in
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between large organizations’ leaders and ordinary Use synonyms
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it is understandable that many argue that paying Linking Words
directors
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salaries
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receive high payments to fairly compensate for the responsibilities that heavily affect the companies’ Use synonyms
overall
performance.
On one hand, it is expected that Linking Words
employees
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due to
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such
a heavy workload. Practically, they only receive a fraction of their leaders’ earnings. Linking Words
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employees
are the ones who bring a leader’s vision into reality. Use synonyms
However
, the payment system depicts that their positions do not wholly reflect the performance of the company or affect the company’s decision-making process.
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On the other hand
, major leaders hold crucial responsibilities, despite fewer working hours and tasks. The weight of these duties can cause a high level of pressure that only experts and professionals can bear. Linking Words
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, not only personal tasks are required, but human management is Linking Words
also
one of the core skill sets that Linking Words
directors
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directors
lack the ability to harmonize their teams and resolve mutual conflicts, the Use synonyms
employees
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as well as
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employees
themselves, which reflects their amount of Use synonyms
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In conclusion, I am of the opinion that large corporations' Use synonyms
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due to
the stressful nature of work, Linking Words
while
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employees
receive less money as they only contribute to a smaller picture of the companies.Use synonyms
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