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Some people believe that it is best to do the same type of work throughout your life. Others feel that it is beneficial to change jobs often. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many
people
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 argue that doing the same kind of
job
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 is the most appropriate thing to do in whole life. While others say it is best to change the
work
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 often.
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, I believe sticking to one
job
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 is good for career development.
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, switching jobs frequently can be adventurous and exciting for the person
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it has some disadvantages too.
Firstly
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,
people
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 have higher expectations in life to achieve their goals. There are many
work
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 sectors in which
people
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 get higher posts due to their experiences. To get a good
job
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 in a specialised area needs
work
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 experience.
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, some
people
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 who are highly enthusiastic about their
work
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 usually stick to one
job
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. Whether it is the media or advertising sector,
people
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 on the higher post are content to do their
work
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.
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, in the marketing sector, many
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 who are sitting on higher post has worked for the company for a long period of time.
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, few
people
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 take risks in their careers. Meanwhile, they are not concerned about their promotion. They take chances and change their jobs from one to another.
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 does not affect them and they are not stuck to their same
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 roles.
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, sometimes companies loss could be the factor for the employee to see
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another career
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. There are some
people
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 who are not determined in their future career roles but the excitement for doing new
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 could lead them to switch companies. To conclude, changing jobs quite often could be unpredictable for the stability of employees in the workplace and it has some drawbacks.
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 doing the same
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 can be some time is boring but it gives the sense of
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 security for the person.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career longevity
  • Mastery
  • Professional growth
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal development
  • Routine
  • Work relationships
  • Company culture
  • Boredom
  • Stagnation
  • Adaptability
  • Networking
  • Industries
  • Expertise development
  • Job security
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