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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

#dangers #people #habit #society
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Smoking is the main factor of
Non communicable
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 Diseases or NCD ,
that
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 leads to the cause of death in humans. There are many adverse effects of smoking,
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 many scientific papers have proved the relative risk of many chronic diseases.
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, some people still smoked and there are many categories of smoking products that are available in the market. There are more than 10 substances in tobacco usage and Tar and Nicotine are
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 common found dangerous chemical agents that cause many diseases in the human body. There are many publications that showed smoking related to oral cancer, lung cancer, high risk of cardiovascular events, myocardial infarction and so on.
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, there are some relationships between
smokers
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 who have less life expectancy compared to those who never smoked. Some people say that habits can be changed or adjusted within 7 weeks. There are many programs for supporting smoking cessation. One of the most successful programs is called
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 A is to ask, the healthcare worker or healthcare officer will ask the
smokers
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 for quitting smoking habit by educating them and
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 the drawback effects. The
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 A is to give them some advice, they would give the smoker about the method to reducing smoking gradually and refer to psychologists for providing more information. And
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, the
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 A is to assist, the health- care worker will take part as an assistant for encouraging
smokers
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 to avoid using tobacco in long term and monitor their symptoms every year.
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, there are many strategies that have been confirmed for reducing smoking in
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heavy
smokers
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such
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 as MI or Motivated intervention or 5 A , that could make smoking cessation accomplished. In conclusion, even there were no magic bulletproof or specific ways to reduce smoking in people who were addicted to tobacco or other smoking substances. We need to integrate the most appropriate way for behaviour changing and encourage
smokers
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 to quit and generate their individual awareness.
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, "no blame culture" is
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 effective to those who smoked and we need to emphasize the side effects of smoking that cause many damages to their
healths
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, families and communities.
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