Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals think that it is
positive
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sign to share
data
as much as possible in different
sector
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sectors
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like
science
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experiment
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experiments
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,
buisness
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business
and
educational
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world. Whereas, others claim that some
information
is vital to be shared leniently.
However
, in my opinion, I completely agree
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the
first
statement and there are some reasons that are discussed in the below paragraphs.
To begin
with, according to me, sharing
information
is beneficial for other people. The main reason for
that is
shared
information
can be
main
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foundation for new inventions.
For example
, in the field of
research
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it is very crucial to have previous
data
depending on which development can be made.
Hence
, using
this
information
can be useful for
further
advancement of the research, and could get
result
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results
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easily on particular experiment within
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a short
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time
by
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the help of previous
data
.
However
, I believe it is disastrous to give away some vital
information
freely. Sharing beneficial
information
could have
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on strategies in
negative
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way.
For instance
, in a business marketing sector startup ideas and their investors is
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top most
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priority for not to share their
information
, if
data
get revealed it effect
on
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their commercial company as well as their employees. It
is
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also
affect the image of their company when they give away important
data
freely in
business
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market.
Hence
, sharing
data
should be possible but up to a certain limit. In conclusion, in my opinion,
share
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important
data
could be beneficial for others in different sectors.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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