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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study aboard. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In the 21st century, studying abroad was gaining momentum and a turning point due to the phenomenon
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 as globalization. Nowadays, students have lots of opportunities to study abroad. Studying outside the country has numerous benefits , yet it comes with
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. The experience of studying abroad doesn’t end at the campus gates. During holidays and weekends, the student is going to explore the country getting to know its geographic landmarks. Meeting other people from different
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mentalities
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 Mentalities and backgrounds. Learning new heritages, habits and lifestyles. It would be
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 opportunity to go back with lots of unforgettable memories. That lasts for
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 lifetime.
Moreover
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 situation helps students graduate from
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 or famous universities worldwide.
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 opens lots of opportunities for their own careers later on. As well as, allowing them to find various majors that may bw\e not
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 in their countries, which allows them to achieve their goals and follow their passion anywhere.
On the contrary
, being an overseas student is accompanied
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 some difficulties. Trying to accommodate in
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 culture is not that easy. Staying far from the beloved ones and family is
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 another challenge. Adapting and learning new languages may be as well a reason to delay graduating. Though it could be interesting, it is not easily achievable.
Nevertheless
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, paying high tuition fees should be taken into consideration when planning to study outside. A sum up, I would like to say that the benefits of studying in
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 country
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 the risks. It helps
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 between different cultures. Opening new and various opportunities to fresh
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graduate
graduates
 to integrate more in the
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 market.
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