The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise, to what extent do you agree

Some people believe that doing
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regular
exercise
is the main reason for developing
health
quality, while others think that not only
exercise
can produce better
health
but
also
there are many factors that can improve it. From my point of view, I agree with the latter views and think that we, all
human
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, have
an alternative
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an alternative way
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ways
to build
healthy
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life
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. The reasons to support my opinion will be
disscussed
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discussed
in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, there are various things to make us have a healthy life.
Food
,
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is one of the important factors.
For instance
, people who do
exercise
everyday
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, but usually eat only fast
food
such
as burgers, pizzas and sausages. They will be gain more weight because
exercise
is not enough for fighting what you eat. So, if you want to have good
health
, you have to consume more good
food
and less fast
food
can help your
body
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health
.
Secondly
, having meditation will
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your inner
health
. It can reduce tiredness
also
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your energy for living.
For example
,
last
year I have read a book and it was a topic about 'Easy
ways
to live
longer'
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, it says if you do meditate 15 minutes per day,
you
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life will be 1 day expand.
Therefore
, I have tried to meditate for 1 week because I have a headache every night before I slept and
result
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was impressive. To conclude, there are
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plenty of
ways
for improving a healthy body.
Exercise
is one of the significant factors
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the other hand,
food
, meditation and many more can give
a crucial benefits
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to your
health
. Yet, there
is
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no right and wrong
ways
we only have to find
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right one that suits
ourselve
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ourselves
.
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