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The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise, to what extent do you agree

#health #exercise
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Some people believe that doing
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regular
exercise
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 is the main reason for developing
health
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 quality, while others think that not only
exercise
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 can produce better
health
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 but
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 there are many factors that can improve it. From my point of view, I agree with the latter views and think that we, all
human
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, have
an alternative
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an alternative way
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ways
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 to build
healthy
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life
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. The reasons to support my opinion will be
disscussed
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discussed
 in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, there are various things to make us have a healthy life.
Food
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,
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 is one of the important factors.
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, people who do
exercise
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everyday
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, but usually eat only fast
food
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such
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 as burgers, pizzas and sausages. They will be gain more weight because
exercise
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 is not enough for fighting what you eat. So, if you want to have good
health
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, you have to consume more good
food
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 and less fast
food
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 can help your
body
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health
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.
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, having meditation will
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 your inner
health
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. It can reduce tiredness
also
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stores
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 your energy for living.
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,
last
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 year I have read a book and it was a topic about 'Easy
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 to live
longer'
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longer
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, it says if you do meditate 15 minutes per day,
you
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 life will be 1 day expand.
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, I have tried to meditate for 1 week because I have a headache every night before I slept and
result
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 was impressive. To conclude, there are
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plenty of
ways
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 for improving a healthy body.
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 is one of the significant factors
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on
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 the other hand,
food
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, meditation and many more can give
a crucial benefits
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crucial benefits
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 to your
health
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. Yet, there
is
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 no right and wrong
ways
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 we only have to find
a
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 right one that suits
ourselve
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ourselves
.
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