The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise, to what extent do you agree
Some people believe that doing
a
regular Correct article usage
apply
exercise
is the main reason for developing health
quality, while others think that not only exercise
can produce better health
but also
there are many factors that can improve it. From my point of view, I agree with the latter views and think that we, all human
, have Fix the agreement mistake
humans
an alternative
Correct the article-noun agreement
an alternative way
alternative ways
ways
to build healthy
Add an article
a healthy
life
. The reasons to support my opinion will be Replace the word
lives
disscussed
in the following paragraphs.
Correct your spelling
discussed
Firstly
, there are various things to make us have a healthy life. Food
,
is one of the important factors. Remove the comma
apply
For instance
, people who do exercise
everyday
, but usually eat only fast Replace the word
every day
food
such
as burgers, pizzas and sausages. They will be gain more weight because exercise
is not enough for fighting what you eat. So, if you want to have good health
, you have to consume more good food
and less fast food
can help your body
Change noun form
body's
health
.
Secondly
, having meditation will helps
your inner Wrong verb form
help
health
. It can reduce tiredness also
stores
your energy for living. Wrong verb form
store
For example
, last
year I have read a book and it was a topic about 'Easy ways
to live longer'
, it says if you do meditate 15 minutes per day, Correct your spelling
longer
you
life will be 1 day expand. Change the pronoun
your
Therefore
, I have tried to meditate for 1 week because I have a headache every night before I slept and result
was impressive.
To conclude, there are Add an article
the result
a
plenty of Remove the article
apply
ways
for improving a healthy body. Exercise
is one of the significant factors on
the other hand, Add the comma(s)
,on
food
, meditation and many more can give a crucial benefits
to your Correct the article-noun agreement
crucial benefits
a crucial benefit
health
. Yet, there is
no right and wrong Change the verb form
are
ways
we only have to find a
right one that suits Correct article usage
the
ourselve
.Correct your spelling
ourselves
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