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Opinion divide concerning what plays a more important role in people's personality development, nature or nurture. What is your opinion?

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No wonder personal
development
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 is one of the things that people dedicate most of their life to, while some believe that genetic factors are key, others see it as more of an acquired skill. In my opinion
personality
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development
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 is acquired as we nurture our minds with knowledge. We can clearly see how
personality
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 develops in grown-ups and
kids
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, through education, guidance and experience.
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, I see that with the correct implantation of modern science and psychology, we have many tools that can develop our personalities in different aspects,
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 as problem-solving skills, communication skills, and emotional intelligence.
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, during my career as a sales manager, I attended several seminars that aid in my
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development
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, these seminars include, team managing, decision-making skills, and others. These classes have helped me develop my
personality
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further
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.
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,
personality
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development
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 becomes very evident when we observe growing children, and how we as adults guide and mould their
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. As a father of two
kids
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, I have witnessed how their
personality
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 is developing, as they become more independent as they grow, as
kids
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 face daily challenges, adults help them to solve these issues,eventually,
kids
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 learn from adults how to solve these issues by them selfs,
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 is a proof how
personality
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development
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 is not nature but nurture.
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, I would say science and education along with parental guidance, is what sets
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development
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.
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 idea that
development
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 is acquired should inspire every one of us to always work on his
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development
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, as well as guiding his or her children, family and loved ones to
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 develop their personalities .

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