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The Internet is now used all around the world as a source of information and communication. However, it's often controversial, so many people think it needs to be controlled. Others believe there should be no interference whatsoever. Discuss both points of view, and give your opinion

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Information technology has been developed over the
last
 few decades to a climax level and the
Internet
 has been the backbone of
this
development
 .while, some people are negative about
this
development
 mainly due to
internet
 crimes , another group is still positive about
this
 due to reasons like the
development
 of education and health. considering all these,
this
 writer opines that we have to use the
internet
 with some limitations .
To begin
 with ,
as a result
 of its rapid
development
 , the
internet
 has been used for almost all the functions of the world
such
 as education ,communication , sports , business and more interestingly banking systems . Unfortunately ,
this
 has led to the
development
 of
internet
 crimes like online bank robbery and money laundering .
for instance
 , according to the survey done by Oxford University in 2020, there is about a 25% increase in
internet
 crimes in the bank sector alone compared to
last
 year .
On the contrary
 , certain parts of society are still optimistic about
this
development
 because of its positive developments that have been occurred during the
last
 decades for certain aspects of life
such
 as health , education , business and entertainment due to the
internet
. for ,instance they try to highlight the fact that , improvement of the standards of living due to the
internet
 during the
last
 decade . In conclusion , even though there is a significant
development
 in information technology due to the
internet
 ,most people try to refuse
this
, due to its drawbacks
such
 as
internet
 burgling .
however
, the majority still believe in the
internet
 since it helped the nations to overcome their problems .
Hence
,
this
 writer wishes to opine that the
internet
 should be used with caution, and the governments should intervene more on
this
 matter.
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