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plastic bags ,plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. what damage does plastic do to the environment?what can be done by gonernments and individuals to solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottles #environment #damage #gonernments #individuals
It is unquestionable that the overuse
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plastic
platic
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 is one of the urgent issues in
such
a
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contemporary days.
As a result
 of the use of excessive
plastic
, the
enviornment
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environment
have
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has
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 been
distructed
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distracted
 consistently. In response
this
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 problem, societies and individuals have to work
for
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apply
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the decrease
plastic
 utilization. These days, the more use
plastic
, the
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 more be hard to
dispose
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 the
plastic
. The treatment of discarded
plastic
 has
enormously
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 negative impact on eco. Especially, many countries have burned
plastic
 for disposal since, it takes a long time to
degration
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degradation
unlike
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 wood,
this
 behaviour mess up the quality of atmosphere and it leads to
destruction
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the destruction
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 of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer.
Therefore
, much needs to be done to address
this circumstances
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this circumstance
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. To tackle
this
 trouble, governments must support and invest
companies
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in companies
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, which try to develop effective biodegradation technology. The material used by
this
 technology can help eco to
be destruct
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 slowly.
In addition
, individuals should do recycling actively. It is evident that melting old
plastic
 can be changed as
new
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a new
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 one. So,
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a human
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human
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 must
recyle
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recycle
recycled
plastic
 items in according to recycling rules. It is clear that
to
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these resolution
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 can help
environment
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the environment
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 to become clean. To sum up,
usage
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 a lot of
plastic
 causes harm to whole the world
becasue
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because
plastic
 has a trait that be hard to
dispose
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ofdispose
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.
Therefore
, societies around the world need to work together to minimize the impact on
environment
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the environment
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 by supporting businesses, which make eco-friendly
material
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materials
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 and adapting to
recyling
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recycling
.
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