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Success if often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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Almost everyone strives to become successful. Mostly,
People
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 tends to believe that if you are having a lot of material belongings and
wealth
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 that it will lead automatically to success.
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, the question arises if
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 is actually true.
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, I think that
wealth
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 is not the best measure of success.
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 is because some
people
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 always try to do something for someone else.
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, If I am very concerned about the climate and always donates my salary to charities,
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 my measurable
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 is not high.
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, I can have to feel that I am successful because I can give money to other
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instead
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 of using it for myself. A better definition of success is from my point of view that you can contribute to the
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 in a certain way.
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, some
people
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 do not want an enormous amount of material belongings.
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 arises from their thoughts that happiness will come from immaterial belongings
instead
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 of materials.
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, they rather go on a holiday than buy some jewels. By doing so, they are using their
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 to see a bigger part of the
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. In conclusion, I think that you can become successful by contributing to the
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. The more value you add, the more successful you will be.
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 to that,
people
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 will always think that having a lot of materials will make them happy. That will
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 be a grain of truth, but the more
people
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 tend to think that way, the more individual the
world
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 will become.
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