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Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe that it is better for them to study alone.

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People have different views about whether or not
students
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 should study alone. I hold the opinion that
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 of
students
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while
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 studying in groups will be higher compared to those, who study solo.
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 with, people’s views can be different compared to each other. They can receive and understand information variously. In
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 conversations, these viewpoints will align
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 objective
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. It could be
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 big help to notice something deeper and eliminate wrong verdicts.
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 someone sees the fact
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 the
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 side,
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one
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 can help him to find another side. But
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second
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 can miss the point of
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, and when these viewpoints
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unite, all members of that
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 can confirm
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 fact with arguments from different notions.
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,
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 of the most important features of
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 studies,
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 existence of studying tendency. The studying tendency forces all members to work or study.
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, everyone gets a motivation seeing that others studying
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 and
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 to be consistent
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this
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 hardworking
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. As an illustration, there are 10
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 in
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the imaginary
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 cabinet, and 7 of them are hardworking. Obviously, 3 other
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 start to do that. But
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 tendency has a little disadvantage: if half or more
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do something inconsistent to hardworking, throw the time everyone who was in that cabinet,
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 doing profitable things. In summary, despite the little flaw,
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the advantages
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 of
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group-working
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group working
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 are far more than
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the disadvantages
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.
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 members will help and motivate each other
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while
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 studying alone can be exhausting.
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task achievement
Your essay largely remains on topic and addresses the majority of the question prompts, ensuring a mostly complete response. However, deeper elaboration on how group interactions specifically enhance learning outcomes and clearer differentiation between group and solo study benefits could further strengthen the argument.
task achievement
While your ideas are clear and understandable, at times, the essay would benefit from further clarity and thoroughness. More detailed examples and comprehensive explanations could make your arguments more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Logical connectors and a clear structure are present throughout the essay which maintains coherence. However, some sentences would benefit from smoother transitions, and the logical flow between certain ideas could be improved to enhance readability.
coherence cohesion
The introduction lays a clear foundation for the subject and the conclusion succinctly wraps up the discussed points. Maintain this structure as it keeps your essay organized.
coherence cohesion
You support your main points with relevant examples, but some points within your essay could be better explained or developed with more precise information or examples. Adding statistical data or referencing studies could enhance your arguments.
coherence cohesion
You maintain a clear and concise introduction and conclusion, which frame your essay effectively and make your arguments more persuasive.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic well and acknowledges multiple viewpoints, showing an understanding of different perspectives.
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The examples used in your essay are relevant and help support your main arguments. They aid in illustrating the points you make about the advantages of group study.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative learning
  • peer feedback
  • social interaction
  • deep understanding
  • group dynamics
  • personalized learning
  • self-discipline
  • concentration
  • diverse perspectives
  • isolation
  • motivation
  • peer support
  • groupthink
  • distractions
  • commitment
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