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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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The
crime
rate
 is increasing all over the world, day by day. in
this
 essay, I will highlight the main reasons, why
people
 are committing a
crime
 and propose solutions to those problems.
Firstly
, one of the biggest reasons for an increased number of crimes in any
country
 is the Economical condition of that
country
. it is generally thought that the
crime
rate
 in undeveloped countries is higher than in developed countries.
For instance
, many
people
 living in India can merely afford two times of meals a day, because jobs are hard to find, so the
crime
rate
 is much higher in India because
people
 try to use all means, whether legal or illegal to get their fair share from society,
In contrast
, if we look at the developed
country
,
such
 as Australia, where most
people
 are economical stable so
crime
rate
 is much lower.
Therefore
, Economical conditions of any
country
 have a direct impact on the
crime
rate
.
Secondly
,
Education
also
 plays a major role in a low
crime
rate
 in any
country
, If governments start providing free
education
 to everyone regardless of their economical condition
then
people
 will be able to differentiate between Good and Bad and they will make much wiser decisions,
For example
, an uneducated society where
people
 can't differentiate what's good or bad for them, there,
people
 will choose an easy way to come out of any difficult situation, even if that easy involves doing criminal activities,
This
 problem can be solved by spreading awareness and free
education
 in society. In conclusion, Indeed
crime
rate
 is increasing in many countries, but the
crime
rate
 will be much lower in future if respective governments take responsibility for
people
 and they start providing basic human rights,
such
 as social justice, free
education
 and economic stability for
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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