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The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Currently, overweight
people
 in some countries are increased considerably which are the
problem
 that government and citizen need to collaborate to solve
this
problem
. In order to solve the issue, most policies are to encourage more exercise in the community
such
 as constructing a gym, park, swimming pool.
However
, I disagree that an increase in physical education classes will assist the crowd to have good shape and
health
.
This
 essay will include my controversies to support my idea.
Firstly
, only exercise cannot make humans have an appropriate shape. According to research, playing sport affects weight reduction for only thirty
percent
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, at the rest, eating habits are the most effective way to reduce mass. The author should explain
this
 information obviously that junk food and high-fat food must be avoided
such
 as hamburgers, cheese, pizza.
Therefore
, providing the information and encouraging them to good consumption is more crucial than the physical education lessons in the school curriculum.
Secondly
, presently, the tread about real size beauty is coming which make
people
 satisfy to have the chubby shape.
This
 perspective causes the unchanged in lifestyle,
moreover
, most of them have
the
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 sedentary lifestyle which reinforces the deterioration in the organism. Government should take care of
this
problem
 by encouraging
people
 to live in the appropriate direction.
Thus
, mindset and values are
also
 important to deal with
health
 issues. In conclusion, more physical education lessons are not the best way to solve the
health
problem
 because the student will forget the concept after taking the examination. In my opinion, good consumption behaviour and thoughtfulness are the most efficient way. In prediction, many developed countries will try to adapt
people
's lifestyles
such
 as building more walkways for more pedestrians. Citizens will have more movement for good
health
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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